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Comments Thank you. iīm so glad that you like that. it means so much for me.
The story is happening in the presence, so thatīs why I used present tense. But when the character is talking about his past, things that happened to him (like bullying in the school), itīs past and thatīs why I used past tense. Sorry for giving you a feeling of mixing it.  You're welcome.
I agree that you can change the tenses that the characters use when they're talking. However, in some parts of your work, though, in some of the non-dialogue parts, the tenses shift a bit. |
Sta.sh
There is a lot of thought into this poem, as there are many philosophical things you're talking about, in this poem/story.
I agree that labelling isn't the best thing for humans.
-> Why? Why it´s so hard to escape labels? Why is there nowhere to run? What´s wrong with me? <-
However, I have a curiosity. The poem is written in both, the past and present tenses. Which tense do you intend to write the poem/story?
I always hated when people looked at me. I wished to be invisible, tried to be like others. It never worked. Why me? What´s wrong with me? <- Past tense.
I´m scared. I look behind me to see people standing there, watching me with cold, cruel eyes. What´s wrong with me? <- Present tense. We usually don't mix them up. That's the only thing that doesn't quite feel right in the poem/story.
Other than the tenses, though, this is very good stuff.