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I have made a form about my series. I made it in order to get some input into my new story series. I can't wait to get some answers! !
Link to the form: [link] .
-> As Sonic finishes, Amy Jr. smiles and responds with, “Well, he’s cute, can whip a joke out of any sentence, and is smart. I tell ya, Dad, Moe has a way to make my day, no matter how bad it gets.” <- Epic foreshadowing.
-> The Hacker thinks how he is going to word it for a few moments. “Well, let’s see. A month ago, at the playground, the public one, a girl decided to talk to Moe. You know? Amelia? She’s a good friend of his. At any rate, Amy Jr. ran up to them. She pushed the girl away from Moe and told Amelia that Moe was busy. As soon as Amelia left, Amy Jr. kept watching the girl as she left. Don’t tell me this has no meaning. I think she may be attached to our son, as I get a feeling her ‘Birthday Present’ doesn’t come in stores!” <- A very strong piece of evidence that there's something obviously fishy going on.
I think Amy Jr. should decide for herself on whether or not she wants Moe. However, I am more than 90% certain she wants more than a mere friendship with Moe. I dunno. Call me a shipper, but, I'll chance it.
To those who disagree with my views about Amy Jr. taking a liking to Moe, tell me why you're opposing the pairing. Sure, they're different animal species. However, that isn't the big picture, in my eyes. I think that as long as they respect one another and make each other happy, they can do as they wish. I have no qualms about them getting together, someday.
"Sonic Jr and Amy Jr’s 6th birthday is 4 March 2013. Amy Jr. is always happy when she gets to spend the day with Moe.
She can’t explain it, but, she enjoys his company. Her behaviour towards Moe doesn’t alarm many people."
You use very short sentences. That makes story feel somehow cut into pieces for me. Short sentences are good to create drama, to make story flow faster, but you shouldn´t overuse them. If you read a bestseller, you can easily find sentences which take five lines and more.
I can´t tell much about characters, as I´m not familiar with the fandom (I assume it´s based on the Sonic, the hedgehog). That´s why I give average rating for originality.
Thanks. ! There's quite a bit of the series, so, feel free to look around, eh.
I am already writing the concluding story to the First Saga. But, not to worry, the A New Life Era series itself will continue. Basically, the Sagas are different chapters in the storyline.
However, The Hacker himself doesn’t have anything against the potential of Amy Jr falling for Moe - The Hacker is merely engaging in the art of shipping. I’m sure Sonic won’t mind it, either. However, Amy Jr and Moe might make a scene with their parents if either one doesn’t agree with the pairing.